tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6148399185610011343.post3190347648617046392..comments2023-04-29T03:26:38.454-05:00Comments on MilkyWay: The Life of a Chocolate Girl in the City: Sparks are flying...MJhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07258785477367973194noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6148399185610011343.post-575643450927314302010-11-18T08:58:16.910-06:002010-11-18T08:58:16.910-06:00That comma after the word you, make all the differ...That comma after the word you, make all the difference.ISAJAMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04127366149674537101noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6148399185610011343.post-4329874290302578992010-11-18T05:47:15.169-06:002010-11-18T05:47:15.169-06:00It is to be read like: the high school you, is in ...It is to be read like: the high school you, is in a twin bed...I am speaking of myself in the past tense and stepping out of the first person mode. This draws the reader in (hopefully) to show how time flies. I am speaking of the high school Maya and the 30 year old Maya...I'll read it out loud to you, so you will know how it is to sound. Thanks!MJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07258785477367973194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6148399185610011343.post-43806002327587713802010-11-18T05:29:08.741-06:002010-11-18T05:29:08.741-06:00Oh, Maya I was reading and enjoying your blog and ...Oh, Maya I was reading and enjoying your blog and then at the very end you did a Mama. It starts off with "One day you is in...."YOU IS IN"? What is that? I was just thinking how this one was good enough to be sent to some of those black zines, cause it was singing a all to common song, but then you messed up the last part. It was like a old 45 record with a big scratch in the best part. Proof read Maya, I love your writing. Your college education was the best money your Dad and I ever spent. MamaISAJAMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04127366149674537101noreply@blogger.com